I liked your review, and I would like to suggest you some passages. Do what you want with them. I won't shoehorn them in the review myself, since I don't want to mess your style and I don't know much about the comics them.
-About the whole measures and blood types shit on the writing review:
"…Here's a trend many amateur writers try and fail at. They throw random shit at character pages because they think it passes out as characterization or anything worth reading. They don't know what they are talking about. I've read even in the least serious anime magazines about how Japanese mangakas and directors (and even some American comic makers) interpret blood types as personality groups and compatibility patterns in relations. Does this have any of that? Is the blood type relevant in ANY WAY to what the characters are or act like? NO. He's just wasting time and webspace trying to make her stain-depth characters any deeper by telling what their fucking blood looks like. Sad."
"…What, with all that shitty art and forms, he actually thinks telling us the precise measures of his characters is a wise move? Does anyone want to try and see if the drawings actually match these figures? He must be the dumbest author ever, actually hinting to his own incompetence by stating things he can't back up with his drawing. Seriously, don't do that. That's what Mookie does when his expo-babble gets the best of him."
Also, man, killer conclusion. I think you've finally nailed the concept of having bad shit up on the internet. I salute you. This is the kind of stones that need to be thrown at Teracciano to wake him up from his sketchpad fantasies of glory and talent.